Judge: Turtle
Rank: 2nd
(You can find Turtle's judging comments here.)
Some extreme annoyances, including the lack of a pre-fab party, but it's far more involved and larger than the other entries. It impressed me the most as something the designer spent a lot of effort on. Of course, it might break the size and time limit restrictions we put on contestants, so I don't know if it can be legitimately declared winner.
I really liked this scenario- it had a very intricate and rich plot, cool character, good (if slightly repetitive) visuals, challenging combat, etc. Even if I allow for the fact that it fails to fit withing the bounds of the 1/10 contest, it's still far and away the best, IMO.